He sits
He waits
He watches
He cares but
You care nothing
You wonder
You wait
But yet you are too late
He made his move
Now you are in your grave
6 feet under they all say
Until next year on
All- hallows -eve when you are
The one that is sitting, watching,waiting, caring
But until then
When you walk past the grave yard
You will here
My heart pouning....
For revenge
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(periods here might make it seem more final. I love the scary short sentences!)
He sits
He waits
He watches
He cares but
You care nothing
(What does this line mean?)
You wonder
You wait
But yet you are too late
He made his move
(line break here?)
Now you are in your grave
6 feet under they all say
Until next year on
All- hallows -eve when you are
The one that is sitting, watching,waiting, caring
(So Creepy!)
But until then
When you walk past the graveyard (1 word)
You will here (hear)
My heart pounding....
For revenge
Wow! I am impressed that you got into such a spooky character's voice. I love the word choice. Great action verbs! I'd use your line breaks and stanza breaks to create even more suspense!
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