"he will make a way so think before you make a mistake." I liked this line a lot because even though you make mistakes there is a way to get out! But I think you could have made your poem a little longer,maybe tell why life is tough or some examples. ♥kelbie
I love the thoughts here. I wonder about the story behind the lesson. I like the encouraging tone mixed with empathy that understands that bad things happen.
I like the same line as Kelbie. I like the rhymes. I think you could have made it better than it already is by maybe adding a metaphor or simile. Overall your poem was great!
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"he will make a way so think before you make a mistake."
I liked this line a lot because even though you make mistakes there is a way to get out! But I think you could have made your poem a little longer,maybe tell why life is tough or some examples.
♥kelbie
I love the thoughts here. I wonder about the story behind the lesson. I like the encouraging tone mixed with empathy that understands that bad things happen.
I like the same line as Kelbie. I like the rhymes. I think you could have made it better than it already is by maybe adding a metaphor or simile. Overall your poem was great!
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